Fighting Choreography script!
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Re: Fighting Choreography script!
It's like he was lying for comic effect.
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Re: Fighting Choreography script!
Like some kind of reverse troll?
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I'm kind of disappointed, honestly.
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Please review it, I haven't read it yet.
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Review'd.LordRetard wrote:This is my favourite line.AHMETxRock wrote:The leader of the bandits, who I think I should name SNARL, commands his three underlings to take out the pest, royal, who isn't even armed.
The way it's written reminds me of a live-action Batman show or maybe Jackie Chan, but honestly I'm not very good at visualising these things. More to the point I'd actually like to see what you can do with this, if only a rough draft of this intro. It'd definitely be worth the practice, which is the most important thing in my mind.
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That was sooo last page. We want a new review.
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Re: Fighting Choreography script!
Hell if I'm writing another one. Find someone else to read it.
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It sukd dik.
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Wow. This like me and my criticism of people who have sex. THANKS A LOT EVERYONE!
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Review: It was an interesting read, but not a 'story', more the directions for a strip of drawings. Names where a bit cliche (seriously I'm just as bad with names though), action was interesting and we want to see it in drawing form.
Ta da.
Ta da.
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First bandit and second bandit are very generic names, but I thought that Third Bandit would win over the crowd.Kimra wrote:Review: It was an interesting read, but not a 'story', more the directions for a strip of drawings. Names where a bit cliche (seriously I'm just as bad with names though), action was interesting and we want to see it in drawing form.
Ta da.
Most of my story summaries are left loose for fact and dialogue change. I used to type it up but then I'm like, OHMAHGAWD THIS WOULD WORK SO WELL INTO THE STORY! Like when a trick that was commonly used as a prank and a gag actually makes perfect sense on how to beat a guy. I cracked up at it, and it took me a half hour to explain the story to my friends so that they'd know enough of it to laugh along. They told me to start writing some stuff up, so I wrote this entry.
Usually I would cut of what I was telling you, so that you didn't know why I connected what I said with what was going on. This is how my mind works. I won't tell you again.
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Won't tell me what?AHMETxRock wrote:I won't tell you again.
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